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Post by nix on Jul 26, 2008 12:11:50 GMT -5
Here's a screenplay I'm working on for Filmation Presents: The Original Ghostbusters, of which the "Slimer sequence" was only a small part. ----------------------------------------------- ---PRETITLES---
(An EXPLORER and his ANDROID are in a CAVE. Suddenly, the ANDROID them comes upon AN UNUSUAL SIGHT.)
ANDROID: Come quickly! I have found something!
EXPLORER: What? What have you found?
(Both of them CEASE TALKING and look at what they've found: AN ANCIENT PIPE ORGAN, WITH KEYS MADE OF BONES, AND A ROW OF SKULLS OVER THE KEYS. IN FACT, THE WHOLE THING LOOKS BONY AND SLIGHTLY REPTILIAN--I TIP MY HAT TO THE GOONIES HERE. ODDLY, THERE'S A CRYSTAL BALL OF SOME KIND EMBEDDED IN THE FRONT OF THE INSTRUMENT.)
ANDROID: What is this strange object?
EXPLORER: Scary as hell.
ANDROID: But what is it? Searching databanks...the image matches an ancient instrument called a "Pipe Organ".
EXPLORER: Whatever. Let's just get as far away from it as we can.
(They turn to move away from it, but the explorer SLIPS on the slick ground, LOSING BALANCE and HITTING HIS HEAD on the keys. The cave begins to SHAKE, as if an EARTHQUAKE has just started. SMOKE AND FLAMES BEGIN TO POUR OUT OF THE PIPE ORGAN AS PRIME EVIL is unleashed as a WHIRLING CLOUD OF BLACK SMOKE WITH GLOWING RED EYES.)
PRIME EVIL I have been awakened after 10,000 years...the time is right. Now, my conquest of the Cosmos begins!
(The explorers are totally speechless, SCARED OUT OF THEIR WITS.)
PRIME EVIL Please accept this token of my gratitude.
HE GIVES THEM A QUICK, “PAINLESS” DEATH BY VAPORIZATION, TAKING FOR HIMSELF A PHYSICAL FORM NOT UNLIKE THE GRIM REAPER.
PRIME EVIL (thinking it over) Well, it shall have to do for now. Unless...
(Picking up the EXPLORER'S SKULL and the ANDROID PARTS, he summons forth some DARK MAGIC, turning the assorted bits into a HELM, worthy for a king.
PRIME EVIL Now that's much better!
(he turns around)
And my Bone Troller!
(HE SLAMS HIS NEW HANDS DOWN ON THE KEYS, WRINGING OUT A PAINFUL NOTE.)
PRIME EVIL (continued) Hmm...needs some fine-tuning, but it still works after all this time! Now that my slumber has ended, I shall return to the Fifth Dimension and enhance this form. Then, I shall begin to conquer this world and bring the Spirit World along with me.
(HE BEGINS TO LAUGH EVILLY. WE ZOOM INTO PRIME EVIL'S GLOWING EYES AND EMPTY COWL. FROM HERE, WE GO INTO THE TITLE SEQUENCE.)
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Post by nix on Jul 26, 2008 12:12:47 GMT -5
--FLASHBACK--
(PETER KONG [who, I'd like to point out, does NOT look like Forrest Tucker] and JOE SPENSER [who DOES look like Larry Storch] have taken their sons, JAKE and EDDIE (14 and 12, respectively) for a little tutorial on ghost-busting. I’d really like for this to take place in a public library (hopefully, the New York Public Library) in homage to the 1984 movie “Ghostbusters”.)
(KONG and SPENSER have gathered their sons together on a Saturday morning to talk to them about their business. They’re old enough; it’s not too early to learn—what if they need to take over?)
KONG Jake, Eddie, Joe and I wanted to talk to you about our business.
JAKE Well, I know you’re an insurance salesman, Dad…
EDDIE And you’re a bank clerk…
SPENSER The truth is, Pete and I have a little job on the side, which we don’t tell your mothers about. See, we also catch ghosts for a man called Zero. And we’re going to take both of you out to the New York Public Library, because they’ve had some trouble with a ghost in the past few days, and, well, I figured it’d be a good tutorial for you boys.
EDDIE But why’s that?
KONG One day, you might have to take over from us. Ghostbusting can sometimes be pretty dangerous, and we’re not getting any younger, so we thought you should learn how it’s done.
CUT TO: THE NYPL
(KONG and SPENSER walk in, carrying a large sports bag full of gadgets. The MANAGER, a PRETTY BLONDE in her mid-thirties, approaches them.)
MANAGER Good morning. You are Kong and Spenser, I presume?
KONG Why yes, we are, madam. Uh, we brought our sons along…you don’t mind, do you?
MANAGER Just as long as they don’t cause a mess.
SPENSER Well, if they knock over a bookshelf, it means we didn’t get there first. Either way, we’ll gladly take the heat.
(Kong starts cracking up) KONG Well, we’d better get down there and see what’s shakin’. (They walk off. SPENSER LIFTS UP his hand, GUILTILY STARING at his wedding ring for a beat. Sucking it up, he SHAKES his head, resolving to catch this ghost and be done with it.)
DOWNSTAIRS
SPENSER No, we agreed that I’m going to use the Spectre-Detector.
KONG Pete, the last time you used the Spectre-Detector it nearly shattered into a million pieces. You take the Ecto-Scope.
SPENSER (defeated) Oh, what the hell. Wish Tracy were here to help us.
KONG You know we can’t let Tracy into the New York Public Library. We’d never get him out! He’d start wanting to rewrite the Theory of Relativity or something.
(JAKE and EDDIE are following their fathers. They’re not far behind. A few more steps, and JAKE SNEEZES, loudly.)
KONG What’s the matter? The dust bothering you?
JAKE No, Dad. It’s something else.
(He SNIFFLES.) It’s like there’s a scent of some kind.
KONG Spence, try the Ecto-Scope. (SPENSER puts the gadget to his eye.)
SPENSER Oh, ho, look at this, Joe! We got footprints! (KONG adjusts a few dials on the Spectre-Detector. It begins to WHINE, like a metal detector—which is what it looks like, in fact.)
KONG Readings are strongest in… (aiming the Detector to the left) …this way.
(They follow KONG’S lead. Some GHOSTLY MOANS gradually go louder. SPENSER gets it in his head to throw a book in the direction of the ghosts. He picks up a random book--Sax Rohmer's Dr. Fu Manchu--and lobs it straight ahead. It disappears. Good. A few seconds later, he gets CLOCKED IN THE HEAD by a flying book--The Revenge of Dr. Fu Manchu.)
SPENSER (livid) Why, I oughta.... (regaining his composure) Follow me, everyone!
(They eventually catch up with the ghost: the ghost of Burgess Meredith's character from the Twilight Zone episode “Time Enough At Last”.)
KONG Okay, I’ve got the Ghost Dematerializer out and ready to go. Get ready…get ready…1, 2…
(The ghost TRANSFORMS into something monstrous.)
EDDIE Too late!
(Fathers and sons begin to CHASE after the ghost, and vice versa, in a scramble through the bookstacks a la Benny Hill, complete with “Yakety Sax”. Finally, they CATCH UP with the offending spook, its energy now depleted.)
KONG Spenser, throw me the Ghost Dematerializer!
(SPENSER reaches into the sports bag, pulling out a WEIRD, CAMERA-LIKE weapon with a sight and rotating BICYCLE MIRROR on it. I’d very much like this to be a replica of the Classic ’75 prop.)
SPENSER I really think you should give this one to Jake. He needs a little practice.
(KONG powers up, then “passes the torch” to his son.)
KONG Now, Jake, while he’s still catching his breath. Just turn the handle and say the magic word.
JAKE (turning the handle, slowly) What’s that? KONG ZAP!
(Jake opens the shutter all the way. A magnificent BEAM OF LIGHT emerges from the weapon’s muzzle and the ghost DISAPPEARS to wherever he came from. The shutter CLOSES with a WHIR.)
SPENSER Great job, Jake. I'd say you two are well on your way to succeeding us as...Ghost Busters.
(CUT TO: A GHOST FACE, WITH A SMILING, “YIPPEE!” EXPRESSION.)
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Post by nix on Sept 15, 2008 14:08:09 GMT -5
Right then...I'm not sure what else I can do with this, but I have a pretty good idea of where I want to take the story:
The Ghostbusters are doing their ghostbusting thing AND investigating a rash of mysterious, non-ghostlike hauntings all across NYC (at least, they're not ghostlike in the FGB sense of the term; more like something from Poltergeist or White Noise--that sort of thing.)
We then find out it's Futura, a rebel from a Prime Evil-haunted future. The hauntings are the result of an "unstable transfer"--a little bit like cell phone static, where you're trying to get through but you're breaking up.
And then, of course, Prime Evil finds out that Jake Kong is their MVP star player, and captures him. Eddie, Tracy, Futura, and Jessica must mount a daring rescue attempt...
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Post by nix on May 31, 2009 13:05:51 GMT -5
I just had an idea that the movie should feature a Sid and Marty Krofft-ish Saturday Morning TV show called Spook Patrol, in which a team of Three Stooges-type policemen solve supernatural mysteries and catch the offending ghosts with a super-powered vacuum cleaner. The show's existence within the movie reinforces the "parallel world" theory whereby The Ghost Busters TV show follows Dan Aykroyd's premise and that the world of the FGBs is "real life," as it were.
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Post by nix on Jun 9, 2009 21:07:23 GMT -5
Okay, one other alteration--the story now takes place in San Francisco rather than NYC.
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Post by Prime Good on Jun 10, 2009 3:20:27 GMT -5
Okay, one other alteration--the story now takes place in San Francisco rather than NYC. The Ghostbusters are located there...
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Post by Devil of the Ghostbusters on Jun 10, 2009 9:35:54 GMT -5
Okay, one other alteration--the story now takes place in San Francisco rather than NYC. The Ghostbusters are located there... I didn't want to say anything, as I'd feel like man that killed christmas or something, but... I'm a bit confused about which ghostbusters generation your talking about here. I was trying to figuring out if Peter Kong was grandpa kong in the animated or what. Prime Evil killing the two humans seems a bit wrong to me, as I believe that if Prime Evil didn't do it in the cartoons, then why now? Its out of character. Is this meant to parody the Ghostbusters Movie? I think you need to first explain the characters and the time period/timeline of the story. Hey, it may be cool, but need to fill us in on the details your adding in the sweeten it.
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Post by nix on Jun 12, 2009 12:33:17 GMT -5
The motion picture timeline? First, it's sort of a parallel-world look at the Columbia Pictures 1984 movie, with events taking place along those lines, but significantly modified for the FGB world (e.g. the Library Ghost is not a field experiment, but "just another assignment" for the fathers).
"Peter Kong" and "Joe Spenser" are meant to be the fathers of Jake and Eddie; I never liked "Jake Kong, Jr." and "Eddie Spenser, Jr." as names for some reason.
This isn't a parody either. I'm not treating it like a colossal joke as the people behind the new Land of the Lost seem content to do.
The California location is derived from the original "series bible" of FGB, as seen on the second boxset of the Animated Series. I'm also looking at a present-day setting, albeit one heavily influenced by 1950's/1960's architecture and design (read: Zeerust). I'm not pinning it down to any specific point in time, though, as I'd like it to have a timeless feel to it.
I'm not actually sure if Prime Evil's the one who kills their fathers. I think it's meant to be an assignment where something went horribly wrong and they accidentally died (cf. the remake of 13 Ghosts) and they only assume it's Prime Evil. HOWEVER, it wouldn't be out of character for this version of Prime Evil, since the ghostbusting equipment (and Futura) gets sent from a future where Prime Evil's already succeeded in taking over, and, with the future accomplished, he's working his way toward the past.
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Post by Devil of the Ghostbusters on Jun 12, 2009 19:41:25 GMT -5
Ok so: Jake Kong sr.= Peter Kong Eddie Spenser sr.=Joe Spenser
Ok, now I'm understanding a bit better. As for it being set in CA, that would further distance itself from the movie. That would be a good move.
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Post by nix on Jul 27, 2009 20:17:13 GMT -5
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gary
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Post by gary on Sept 7, 2009 11:37:13 GMT -5
Ok so: Jake Kong sr.= Peter Kong Eddie Spenser sr.=Joe Spenser Ok, now I'm understanding a bit better. As for it being set in CA, that would further distance itself from the movie. That would be a good move. Why not set it in Oklahoma? there are tax write offs to concidder and plenty of terrific locations within 50 miles of Oklahoma City that would make field location shooting easy. And dont forget that it has an old supernatural history from Werewolf attacks in the 20s(eastern edge of the state), Sasquatch (Cherokee lore call then "The Shy People") sightings, Cryptid creatures ( you never know what you might encounter),Ghosts (of course) and Ancient American Indian legends. Star Trek popularised San Fransisco as bieng a central hub of the world, are you certain it might not be beating a dead horse going back there? In this state you have elements of the old (this is where the Old West finnaly died) and the modern world - lot of places where Prime Evil could have slept for 10.000 years , the Witchita Mountains south of here have that weathered ravaged by time and element look. There are huge caverns that the resurection scene could be shot at. Geologicaly how many caves are in the San Fransisco area? I toyed with such a project at one time and i would have avoided NYC, L.A., SANFRAN and the major cities if only for cost conciderations. You could shoot the principal segments here and infer that it is San Fransisco - in shows like Kojack set in NYC they shot them in California because most cities look alike and unless you make a clear continuity error no one will know the diffrence. Much of 1996s TV movie "Doctor Who" was shot in Canada with a sparce few scenes shot in Frisco. When i read about projects such as this i always apply a production mindset to it regardless if it is made or not, use what i suggested or not, an odd Horror Comedy (possibly with traces of steampunk technology) may be something people will want to see. I wish you well, Good Luck.
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Post by nix on Sept 7, 2009 12:43:28 GMT -5
Well, it wouldn't really be THE S.F./L.A., Gary. It'd be a *stylized* version of SF/LA, gussied up with CGI and shot against a bluescreen.
As I stated above, the GBs are based in California because a) it's considered canon and b) it's New York City's direct opposite, for the "parallel universe" feel.
This isn't going to be an actual fan-film; it's just a fan-fiction right now, where I can offer my vision of what an FGB film might look like, and how the characters would work.
Oh, and: Consider that the FGBs can go anywhere in the world at any time they need to, because they have a flying/transforming car that can travel through time, space, and different dimensions. I'm sure I could work in Oklahoma's werewolf legend somewhere in the script, with Fangster as the culprit.
Also, I never said exactly *where* the caves were located; they're certainly not in California. They're supposed to be just...any old caves, really, and the location isn't important.
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Post by nix on Oct 10, 2009 11:24:12 GMT -5
NEW IDEA, 10/10/09:
One of the subplots within the Motion Picture concerns Prime Evil's experiments with "artificial" ghosts of his own devising. These differ from his Usual Gang of Idiots in that the Dematerializer's effects are permanent on them.
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Post by nix on Oct 10, 2009 23:59:50 GMT -5
I suddenly get the feeling that I should exclude the opening "accidentally releasing Prime Evil from the pipe-organ" sequence and substitute a ripoff from the beginning of 1980's Flash Gordon ("Oh, Klytus, I'm boooored...") except with shots of ghosts attacking the 23rd Century rather than stock footage of various natural disasters.
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Post by nix on Nov 1, 2009 10:56:36 GMT -5
FILMATION'S GHOSTBUSTERS: THE MOVIE
ALTERNATE OPENING SEQUENCE (FLASH GORDON) 01 We open with Universal Studios' latest logo. The UNIVERSAL word fades away as BLUE MISTS and EVIL LIGHTNING pours in over the globe. Looking in, we notice that some of the blue clouds are shaped like MOANING SKULLS. 02 We PULL BACK, and a PURPLE/RED STATIC covers the image of Planet Earth, like someone's looking at it from a screen. PRIME EVIL (not yet seen) *skrak* Oh, Brat-a-Rat...I'm bored out of my skull! The stars are aligned in the correct position, and there's not a dimension for me to torment in sight! BRAT A RAT (not yet seen) Well, what's that planet on your magic screen, your badness? Looks like a nice dimension for you to conquer! PRIME EVIL Indeed, Bratty, indeed. Hmmmm.... (SFX: radio tuning/static) Ah! Planet Earth...Sol 3, Mutter's Spiral. *skrak* (SOME DATA WRITES ITSELF ACROSS THE SCREEN) And yet its population doesn't believe in ghosts! Well, we'll soon fix *that*! *skrak* CLOSE UP on Prime Evil's hands as he SLAMS them down on a set of bone-like pipe organ keys. He plays a tune as we PAN UP on the demonic, baroque pipe-organ's impressive pipes as they GLOW and CRACKLE with evil ghostly energy. We DISSOLVE to images of various Earth cities being menaced by ghosts, ghouls, and spooks of all kinds. A few scenes of terror, and we CUT TO Prime Evil's FACE, a human skull with Terminator-like bits added, and a Jacob's Ladder electric arc inside his mouth, which SPARKS with electricity. PRIME EVIL Yes, Brat-a-Rat, this is *wonderful!* I haven't felt this terrible in millennia! (laughs evilly) (FGB OPENING THEME--"Let's Go Ghostbusters"--fades in) As Prime Evil laughs, electricity sparkles inside his mouth area. We ZOOM into his mouth, and transition into the OPENING TITLES. OPENING TITLES --The opening titles take place against a DEEP BLUE SKY with ROILING BLACK CLOUDS (ink in a water-tank) UNIVERSAL STUDIOS LEGENDARY FILMS and BOOMERANG MEDIA present A JERRY BRUCKHEIMER/LOU SCHEIMER production of A -insert director's name here- FILM (I'm going for John Turteltaub here) --Suddenly, two comet-like BURSTS of LIGHT appear from the upper-left and lower-right corners of the screen, GUNBARRELLING toward the middle of the screen, getting smaller on the way. When they approach the middle of the screen, they INTERSECT, and EXPLODE in a brilliant light, and the FILMATION'S GHOSTBUSTERS LOGO FLIPS DOWN toward us, SETTLING into position three quarters of the way up. VOICES: "Let's go, Ghost...BUSTERS!" --Below the main logo, a white light RACES across the screen, left to right, like the old United Artists logo, and we see a HAZY OUTLINE of the word "Ghostbusters" appear in stylized, 50s-ish font. The word gets filled in by two "Ghostbusters" words, ZOOMING IN into the outline, like a reversed "Superman." The title card COMPLETES itself in a BIG APPLAUSE POINT, dissolving just as suddenly into the CAST CREDITS. -- EVAN ELLINGSON SETH ROGEN (placeholder name here) ED O'NEILL CHARLIE SHEEN JENNIFER LOVE HEWITT CHRISTINA RICCI (or whoever you'd like to play Futura; Ricci is just a placeholder for now) TRACY trained by ANDY SERKIS (NOTE: Only the heroes get top billing for now; it might be interesting for the audience to guess the actors playing the ghosts.) -- Screenplay by -insert writers here- From a story by NICHOLAS A. TOSONI Music composed by --whoever did the music on the series-- and arranged by --whoever will rearrange it-- Based on the FILMATION television series At the end of the opening titles, the FGB logo and Ghostbusters text do their thing at warp speed a la the original series. The music keeps going until the end, when we cut to a title card reading: MANY YEARS EARLIER
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